The Human Who Wanted To Be a Asura Scientist [2.0]

By Jestersan on October 31st, 2016
Race: Human
Gender: Female
Armor: Medium
Color: White
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In Divinity´s Reach born and raised
On the laboratory was where I spent most of my days
Chillin' out maxin' relaxin' all cool
And all shooting some b-elixir outside of the school
When a couple of guys who were up to no good
Started making trouble in my district
I got in one little fight and my mom got scared
She said, "With your potions and bombs you are moving to Rata Sum"

Divinity´s Reach wasn´t a place for a scientist: I born and raised in a farmer family, everyday was the same thing, feed the cows, chase the chickens and maybe kill some spiders. At the beginning everything was fine, a scientist making good fertilizers and, herbicides was practical, but then my obsesion with bombs and hand grenades started with a firework show, one rocket was defective and it went straight a bucket of manure blowing all the poop all over the place, and the i was like "Oh things that makes BUM! and blow things i want more of these, plus i need a bath or two". One day some guys were disturbing at the gate of the school, robbing kids and threatening them, and i throwed some hand made granades. They ran like chickens, but later my mother discovered it, and told me that they are separatist, made my baggage and sent my to Rata Sum with some money. Now i am enrolled in the Pact as field scientist and saboteur.

Regards from Rata Sum

Hi! Im trying to make a scientist girl who is not only on the laboratory, also makes sabotage and is not afraid to be in the field fighting, but without highlight too much. I dont know if i succeeded but to my looks good but i dont know. Tried to make screens in both places, field and laboratory.


Fashion Guru
This might be a nice start to a cool look, but there are some things missing which really pull down my vote..

Firstly, you only use 3 armor pieces which makes it really hard to judge the combination. I think scientists should at least use gloves. There are also great masks for medium armor that could fit a scientist theme, you don't have to use it always but some cool screenshots with it are nice. Shoulders might be hard to choose for a look like this but I think there might be one or two that fit (or at least don't look completely off). Also I don't quite approve of the pants. If you go for a scientist theme maybe less open parts would make more sense (as any kind of acid could injure her badly on skin-open parts).

I like your dye choice, the white in the chestpiece gives a nice scientist feel to the look. Black pants under that white mantle really put up a nice contrast and make it look more scientist-like.

Your screenshots are okay, but it's only the standard idle animation and nothing special sadly.
Maybe try to put up some screens where you use fitting emotes/weapon skills on the right scenery. For example the crafting stations in Rata Sum would be very fitting maybe with some thinking pose or a pose where she mixes elixirs etc.

I like that you put work in your description in form of poem-style, but other parts are missing. Try to explain your thoughts on your look so you can help us understand it better and get us into the right feel!

I think that's everything I want to say, silver for now.
2016-11-01 14:57

Thanks seriously, i will try to improve it, with these advices. The gloves omg, i dont know how i forget those, you are rigth. I will make changes and update it.

Thanks for the advices.
2016-11-02 13:44 in reply to Blackkarmy

2016-11-04 8:07

Fashion Guru
The armor combination now looks really neat and I like seeing those goggles used thematically, a lot of people just throw them on their character for... no apparent reason.
I have talked about the dyes already and I really like them, my only concern are the dyes on the shoulder now. They seem a little too bright compard to the chest piece. Or maybe that's just the material, as the shoulders seem like smoother material than the rough leather on the chestpiece.
Other than than I really like the dye choice!

I can definitely see you made some improvements on the screenshots and I really like them, they are very thematic and fitting with your style!
My only suggestion here would be to use Field of View or horizontal position some more to do some close up shots of the character. But that's optional and I really like it as it is now!

Your updated description is fun to read but isn't that a little bit too straight to instantly throw grenades at people in front of a public school? xD

All in all it's a really nice update with just minor things lacking. That a gold from me!
2016-11-04 9:01


Im glad to see you like the googles, i was undecided between these and the gas mask, but the gas mask looks more for radiation than the alchemist potions and bombs. I was surprised when i see all togheter.

The Shoulders...yeah i see it very bright too, but there wasnt a middle term, i tried Silt and was too dark, tried Celestial and was like fluorescent lamp on my shoulder xD. Im still searching for something more eye friendly, or maybe other shoulders

Just a bit, she have some self-control problems, a side effect of drinking too much Elixir U, but it´s okay, nobody gots hurt and the separatists are very busy at Caudecus Manor.

Seriosly thanks for the recommendations, i will still improving the look.
2016-11-04 16:33 in reply to Blackkarmy

Pinx The Sweet
i really like it , a tiny bit of humor always helps to define the true character .

ill keep an eye on her adventures !
2016-11-06 22:53